Thanks for the great feedback
I think I had a little trouble because I was using the wrong pronouns, the wrong person in there, and don't we get tired of talking about pronouns? But at any rate, I have a tendency to try to speak for everybody, and that's not good because I can only really speak for myself. And obviously, for the simple reason I'm a woman, I can only speak from the woman's point of view. And that's what I did in this poem