Dreams flutter fragile moth wings beating fiercely to reach the moon silver light full of promise beckons wistfully through shadows my heart beats savagely striving until my wings burn
Laura L (she/her)
@Loloflow · 0:49
Ah, fabulous. Fabulous. I loved it. Every second of it. And the length of it made it even more powerful. I saw that you were doing sijo. I've got to try it. I guess it's calling to me. I'm a little intimidated by it, got to tell you. I just kind of don't like to have to think too hard to write. But you have inspired me. You and Jacqueline and Nikki have inspired me to try it
J Stout
@DarkMoonMusings · 1:23
I am a big fan of short poetry and I write a lot of it, but fitting it into this style, into this form was kind of a challenge for me. And I heard of another one too, where you take you write seven haikus about the same subject that are all standalone and yet combine create a bigger picture. And I thought, oh, that would be really interesting too. I'm not sure if I will try that or not, but I like it
Swell Team
@Swell · 0:15
Adenike Nana Esie
@nourishyou · 1:36
I will come back to this form again and again and again. So thank you for giving it a go. And, Laura, I encourage you to do the same, just as an exercise. There's something quite soothing and sense of completeness when you can finally crack it. And I find that they okay because the form requires you to keep that measure in the way you articulate. This was lovely. Moth dreams. It was beautiful, Janice
Delbert Cespedes
@Xgzabeher · 1:33
The intensity of wings beating fiercely and hearts beating savagely until they burn. The wings burn to ash. It's like a capture effort, like earnest, sincere effort in just this short compilation of words. And yeah, I think that's what makes it so beautiful, that what you're trying to express is so clearly and profoundly done and we didn't have to write a thousand lines. You know what I mean? Yeah. Good work, Janice